Hi ,my name is Tuyet. I'm eleven year old. My family live in Doi Can street. There're 4 people. I've got a sister. My sister is sixteen year old. The typical day : i get up at 6.00 and have breakfast . Then i walk to school . It's 2 kilometres . school start at 7.30 and fineshe at 11.00 . After school , i go home , held my mother to make dinner and have a bath. In the free time, i listen to music,watch TV, read book ,.... After dinner, i wash the dishes. Sau đó , start my homework. My day ends at 11.30.
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Sửa lại:
Hi ,my name is Tuyet. I'm eleven years( thêm s) old. My family live in Doi Can street. There're 4 people. I've got a sister. My sister is sixteen years old. The typical day : i get up at 6.00 and have breakfast . Then i walk to school . It's 2 kilometres . school starts at 7.30 and finishes at 11.00 . After school , i go home , help my mother to cook dinner and have a bath. In my free time, i listen to music,watch TV, read books ,.... After dinner, i wash the dishes. Next , I start my homework. My day ends at 11.30.

Hi , my name is Tuyet. I'm eleven year old. My family live in Doi Can street. There're 4 people. I've got a sister. My sister is sixteen year old. The typical day : i get up at 6.00 and have breakfast . Then i walk to school . It's 2 kilometres . school start at 7.30 and fineshes at 11.00 . After school , i go home , held my mother to make dinner and have a bath. In the free time, i listen to music,watch TV, read book ,.... After dinner, i wash the dishes. Sau đó , start my homework. My day ends at 11.30.
year -> years
live -> lives
start -> starts
held -> help
sau đó -> after that
start -> I start to do

Hi ,my name is Tuyet. I'm eleven year old. My family live in Doi Can street. There're 4 people. I've got a sister. My sister is sixteen year old. The typical day : i get up at 6.00 and have breakfast . Then i walk to school . It's 2 kilometres . school start at 7.30 and fineshe at 11.00 . After school , i go home , held my mother to make dinner and have a bath. In the free time, i listen to music,watch TV, read book ,.... After dinner, i wash the dishes. Sau đó , start my homework. My day ends at 11.30.
Từ sai : từ được gach chân, tô đậm.
Sửa: bỏ từ sau đó, rồi thêm từ later vào chỗ bỏ

Hi ,my name is Tuyet. I'm eleven year old. My family live in Doi Can street. There're 4 people. I've got a sister. My sister is sixteen year old. The typical day : i get up at 6.00 and have breakfast . Then i walk to school . It's 2 kilometres . school start at 7.30 and fineshe at 11.00 . After school , i go home , held my mother to make dinner and have a bath. In the free time, i listen to music,watch TV, read book ,.... After dinner, i wash the dishes. Sau đó , start my homework. My day ends at 11.30.
Câu sai : My family live in Doi Can street
 => My family lives in Doi Can street ( My family là số ít)
            My sister is sixteen year old
=> My sister is sixteen years old 9 ( sixteen là số nhiều )
            I've got a sister.
=> I have a sister
            School start at 7.30 and fineshe at 11.00
=> School starts at 7.30 and finíhes at 11.00 am
             After school , i go home , held my mother to make dinner and have a bath
Xong rồi nha
=>  After school , i go home , help my mother to make dinner and have a bath ( help không phải held nhé)
             Sau đó , start my homework
=> Then , I do my homework
             
           
 

Hi ,my name is Tuyet. I'm eleven years old. My family live in Doi Can street. There're 4 people. I've got a sister. My sister is sixteen years old. The typical day : I get up at 6.00 and have breakfast . Then I walk to school . It's 2 kilometres . School starts at 7.30 and fineshes at 11.00 . After school , I go home , help my mother to make dinner and have a bath. In the free time, I listen to music,watch TV, read book ,.... After dinner, I wash the dishes. Later , I start doing homework. My day ends at 11.30.